I recently read a student's essay that contained the following sentences:
- As a matter of fact, it is no clandestine issue to anybody that sport has indisputable impacts on overall health of people.
- The proponents of this view perceive that investment in enhancing the number of health-related facilities is not alone a cure-all for protecting and maintaining healthy atmosphere.
- To revolutionize public health, alternative effective measures are entailed.
I told the student that I thought she was trying too hard to be 'difficult'. Which words or phrases in each sentence do you think I suggested changing?
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